I think you need to remove the link to the other site, that is not allowed and your listing will get pulled.
And since you asked:
I would take lots of pictures and add them to the auction, your picture is to small and looks like a stock photo.
Also you need to say (to cover yourself) that payments made through paypal must be shipped to a confirmed address only, if you don't have a confirmed address you may pay by money order.
I would also add in the listing what your shipping includes (you need to use sig comfirmation), insurance (even though it is at the bottom) and a DC#.
Also, you have it listed that you will take money orders but in order to bid it states that a paypal account is required.